Writing and Rhetoric I

English 151

Instructor: David Sharpe
Ohio University, Athens OH

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LAB SIX-B

Announcements

DUE for the START of LAB SEVEN-A
- feedback, using Track Changes, on two student papers (analysis_writerlastname_yourlastname)
  - for these papers, please don't save them in the shared folder or email them to the writer until after we've had our discussion in class
  - IMPORTANT: one copy of each paper should be printed out with your Track Changes showing. The printouts do not need to be in color.
  - if your paper is one being discussed, print out a copy of the original to have in front of you during the class (you don't need to do feedback for yourself)

write a short paragraph (up to 150 words) saying what you may want to develop in your next project, the Research Paper. Save it as topic_yourname and have it available as a printout at the start of the next lab

the finished Right On! exercise (right-on_yourlastname). Most of you will have this done by the end of this lab.

text reading

Barsam, Looking at Movies

Ch6: Cinematography [for background reading, not for discussion]

Labwork

Routine startup

Open two browsers for classwork

Open a third browser for email

Right On!

Introduction: Making Every Word Count

When you write a first draft, it will often be long and wordy. You need to look at your style and rewrite for economy, flow, and directness. This exercise will help alert you to the value of individual words and phrases. You will be reducing a piece of writing to an exact size. In doing so, you will need to consider the relative importance of words that are making the count too long or too short. Consider every part for what it does and doesn’t do. Leave nothing out that is essential. Summarize and reword if that can accomplish the same thing more successfully. Rewrite this as if you are the original author.

Right On!: the exercise

You will be viewing a document that is about 900 words long
Share the screen between your browser and a new document in Word

Copy the document and paste it into Word

Condense the original document into 300 words -- exactly, not a word more or a word less

include everything that you feel is important

make whatever changes you think will condense the content, by a combination of cutting, rewording, and summarizing

check the number of words at the bottom left of your Word window

Save your condensed version in the shared folder with the name right-on_yourlastname

when you finish, you may be interested in checking some other versions to compare with your own

Okay ... go ahead, open Right On! and begin condensing

Feedback for Class Discussion

The names of the first two papers for class discussion will be announced during the class. Begin adding your suggestions, using Track Changes, now, and continue after class in preparation for discussion during the next class.

add your last name at the end of the filename (analysis_writerlastname_yourlastname)

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