LAB FOUR-B

2. Give feedback on the Synopsis
    
   1. Make sure you have saved your first feedback on the Synopsis in the shared folder
       
   2. Open the second classmate's paper you signed for on the sheet that was passed around
       
      1. Save the proposal in your personal folder with your own name added at the end of the filename (synopsis_writerlastname_yourlastname)

• Confirm that you are adding your own name at the far right

3. Prepare for adding comments

1. Select Review / Track Changes and test that Track Changes is on

4. Make suggested changes directly in the document
    
   1. Comment within the text giving constructive suggestions and rewordings, as in the previous feedback for the Review. Where relevant, explain why you think each suggestion is an improvement. Look for grammatical errors (polishing) and ways to improve the language (think about clarity, conciseness, and fluency).
       
   2. In particular, find at least three places where the description is not clear or complete enough -- not deliberate mysteries as part of the plot, but ambiguities or omissions in the description that prevent you from understanding what is going on.  Point out where too much information is given (we don't need to know the names of every character!).

3. At the bottom of the paper, write a short summary addressed directly to the writer that talks about issues larger than the individual changes you have suggested.  Did the synopsis spend the right amount of time on the beginning, middle, and end of the film, or were parts of it rushed?
    
5. Submit the feedback
    
1. When you are finished, save the feedback in the shared folder
    
   • If you need to continue on this outside of the lab, bring it with you (or email it to yourself) for the start of the next class
      
2. Send the feedback to the original author as well

3. Begin a rewrite on the Synopsis (if time remains in the lab)

1. Open your original Synopsis and save it as a new copy by adding _rewrite at the end of the filename
    
   • This keeps your original untouched in case you want to reverse any future changes
      
2. Open the feedback you have been given and move/resize the window so both the feedback and the rewrite window are visible
    
   • If you don’t see any comments at all in the feedback, a box at the upper left is probably showing "Final". Open up the choices in that box and select "Final Showing Markup".
      
3. Without using Track Changes (this is important!), rewrite and improve your paper, taking into account the feedback you have received. You don’t have to accept suggestions (you’re the boss of your own writing), but seriously consider whether an improvement is needed, and how best to do it.
    
4. The final version of your paper is not due until the end of the quarter, so work on this in stages.  I'd recommend doing some now and some near the end of the course.

4. Prepare your Trial Thesis (if time remains in the lab)