Writing and Rhetoric I

English 151

Instructor: David Sharpe
Ohio University, Athens OH

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LAB THREE-B

Announcements

DUE for START of LAB FOUR-A
- your second paper: a Synopsis (click the link for details)
  - save your file in the shared folder with the following filename: synopsis_yourlastname
- text reading
  - Barsam, Looking at Movies
    - Ch5: Mise-en-Scene
      - choose any ten pages within this section, but in addition, find out what the main term ("Mise-en-Scene") means
      - "Looking At" section at the end is optional
  - Lunsford
    - Sentence Style: Ch27-29: Shifts, Conciseness, Sentence Variety
by the end of today's lab
- the second feedback for the review should be saved in the shared folder (review_writerlastname_yourlastname), completed as far as you can during today's lab. You don't need to work on this outside of the lab.
- the Outlining exercise should be saved in the shared folder (outline_yourlastname), completed only as far as you are able to reach during today's lab. You don't need to work on this outside of the lab, and even if it is not finished, your attempt will count fully as participation.

Labwork

Introduction

Today let's take a moment to catch up and finish whatever loose ends may have developed. Once everything is caught up, you'll have a chance to work on your second paper, the Synopsis.

Routine Startup

Start a second browser

the first browser shows these instructions. Press Control-N to open a second browser and use it to follow links and carry out the instructions.

Start your email in a third browser

Feedback on the Review, continued

You should give feedback for two different papers, as thoroughly as possible. If you didn't finish the second feedback in the last lab, resume now. Do as much as you can within the time of the lab, then save your feedback as far as you have done it in the shared folder. You don't need to work on this outside the lab.

Write your last name on the whiteboard and put a check beside a name that hasn’t been selected

Get a classmate's paper

In the shared folder, click on the review written by the student whose name you have selected and choose Save (not Open)

you will be working on the original paper, not one that already has comments (i.e. look for the file with only one lastname)

IMPORTANT: save the document in your personal folder or on the desktop with your own name added at the end of the filename (review_writerlastname_yourlastname)

This is a standard method of showing who has added material in collaborative writing. The most recent person is always at the end. Please take care to use the correct filenames – if you don’t, they will show up in the wrong place in the directory listing, and could get lost.

Prepare Track Changes for adding feedback

In Word, click the Review or Tools tab at the top, then click on the words "Track Changes", then "Highlight Changes", then have all the boxes checked, especially "Track changes while editing", and then click Options

Depending on your version of Word, you may see a tab that says "Review" and a drop-down list that says "Show Markup". Click Preferences to begin the next step.

Set the Options (or Preferences)

for Insertions, confirm the choice is "Underline" and change the color to Blue

for Deletions, confirm the choice is "Strikethrough" and change the color to Red

for Changed lines, change the choice to (none)

for Track Formatting, select no

for Track Moves, select no

for Use Balloons, change the choice to Never

click on OK

Click on the Word menu, then Preferences, then Edit. Look for "When selecting, automatically select entire word." If there is a checkmark there, remove it and click OK.

In some versions of Word, you'd click on the Office button at the upper left, then on Word Options, then Advanced.

To turn Track Changes on or off at any time, click on the icon with the words "Track Changes"

You can switch back and forth between two views of the document (you'll see a box at the upper left that lists the current view) -- try "Final Showing Markup", and "Original"

Please don’t use the "New comment" feature (it’s not compatible with some versions of Word)

Open a sample document with feedback
1. Open sample-feedback in the shared folder and scan it for ideas to use for your own feedback

Make suggested changes directly in the student document you have chosen

Make insertions and deletions that you think improve the writing. Comment within the text on what you think is written well and give specific re-wordings that might work better. Can the language be more efficient and direct? Try cutting words without damaging the meaning. IMPORTANT: you are not attempting to say that your suggestions are Right versus Wrong … you are offering an opinion in the clearest possible way, and the author is free to consider the change or ignore it.

in every case, don’t point out an error or weakness without suggesting a solution (that makes your comments constructive and improves your own writing abilities)

briefly explain why you are suggesting the change. Add comments by typing directly in the text and surrounding them with [[ and ]] to make the comments easily visible. Please don’t use the "New comment" feature (it’s not compatible with some versions of Word)

Write a response at the bottom of the paper, addressed directly to the writer. Point out the places in the paper that you think are strong, either in the content of what is being said, or how it is said, or both. Point out the places where the paper could be more effective. Raise unanswered questions or doubts, and suggestions on how to deal with them. How can the paper be more persuasive?

Check sample-feedback from the shared folder to see if anything additional can be done with your own feedback

Add the document that has your own feedback to the shared folder using the Name review_writerlastname_yourlastname. In addition, to ensure that the original writer will have access to your feedback, send it as an attachment by email with the Subject Line: review feedback (you don't need to CC me for this).

When you find that your own review has had feedback added, open it and check it using Tools / Track Changes / "Final Showing Markup" (select this in the box at the upper left). If you don’t see any comments at all, confirm that "Final Showing Markup" is selected.

You will have time in another lab to use these suggestions. Wait until then to revise your paper.

Outlining a Movie, continued

Just go as far with this as you can within the lab, and then save it in the shared folder with the name outline_yourlastname. You don't need to work on this outside of the lab (unless you are using the outline to develop your synopsis). Your attempt will count fully as participation.

Introduce yourself to the Outlining tool in Word

Open sample-outline from our shared folder and follow its directions
- check that the correct view is showing -- the Outline button at the bottom of the window should be selected

Create your own outline about a personal movie selection

Start a new, blank document in Word, and change to the Outline view by clicking the Outline button in the lower border of the window. Using Save As, save the new document in your personal folder or on your flashdrive as outline_yourlastname

Begin typing the large divisions of your chosen film. To show subdivisions of any section, type it in first. Once any line is entered, you can demote it or promote it to a lower or higher level.

don't get caught giving too much detail -- start with the broad segments of the whole movie (by location? by time? by major flashbacks?), then expand with the smaller segments within those larger ones

create the outline to follow how the plot unfolds (not the story), as seen in sequence by the viewer

decide whether you want to use the Outlining tool. If not, just write an outline using regular tabs or indents

do as much as you can – but you can expand and finish it on your own afterwards

if you can't remember character names, search for your movie in the International Movie Database at www.imdb.com

you can use this outline as a starting point for your second paper, the synopsis

Work on your Synopsis

Prepare as much as you can of the current writing project, a Synopsis, during the lab. A full first draft is due for the start of next class, brought on a flashdrive (best) or sent to yourself by email. Use the filename synopsis_yourlastname

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